Comments : Can You?

  • 12 years ago

    by Mello193

    Can you
    Be with me when I'm lonely?
    Can you
    Look at me when I'm lonely?
    Can you
    Led me cross to the road?
    Can you
    Think me all the times?
    Can you
    Be a sense of security of mine?
    Can you
    Glance me more?
    Can you
    Be with me a little more?
    Can you
    Be with me at the nights to watch stars?
    The stars with me
    Can you
    Hold my hands tight and never let go?
    Can you
    Come in to my heart
    Can you
    Give me some hope?
    Can you
    Give me some tenderness
    Can you
    Like me back?
    Can you
    Be my love?

    seemed like lyrics to me? well for starters the can you in every other line was annoying if you ask me, you repeated the second and forth line, why? overall just a repetitive nonsensical questionnaire, didn't seem to have flow nor rhyme scheme, over all could be edited, and made into something interesting but overall, uninspired.