Innocence.

by Jess   May 19, 2011


Innocence;

Passionate,
Yet Not Deceiving?
Understanding,
And Still Beleiving?
Constant Failure,
But Never Giving Up?

Who Is She?

In Constant Stress,
She Hold's On Tight.
Hoping One day,
There Wont Be A Fight.

Her Breaking Point,
Is Coming Soon.
She Wishes That One Day,
She'd Know What To Do.

She Smiles With Passion,
Never Does She Cry;
Although The World Can See-
The Pain In Her Eyes.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    Awww such a sad poem yet still a good read

    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Mattias Ostling

    I liked this one very much, and it really conveys a great deal of emotions. I especially liked the first stanza, and how it flows.

    I'll mirror what others have said - I would refrain from capatlizing every first letter. Also, you misspelled "believing" in the first stanza.

    Keep writing!

  • 13 years ago

    by Paul Gondwe

    Brilliant..so much has already been said..this is by far my best of ur poems..great work jessi

  • 13 years ago

    by nouriguess

    "Wont" should be "Won't" with an apostroph! :)

    a beautiful piece that says so much :) keep writing.

  • 13 years ago

    by Britt

    I like how you spelled out the story but also kept something from it, then lead us to the end with the ultimate reveal.

    I have to say aesthetically, I would not capitalize every letter. It gave an "amateur" feel and it's not grammatically correct :) Make look a little easier on the eye to your readers as well :)

    "She Hold's On Tight. "

    Hold's should be holds.. it doesn't need the apostrophe :)

    Overall this is a very good poem with a lot of emotion and feeling. Something that is definitely easily related to for any age, we've all been there whether we're teenagers or old maids! Lol. Beautifully done.

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