Maybe I loved this poem so much because I could relate to it so much.

Only a few things -

hold should be held in the first line.

The last stanza could perhaps be a bit stronger. But seriously the metaphors although simple and a little cliche, I adored them. This poem as a whole was probably one of your best ones honestly. Well done Yaki!

This write is so simple yet the emotions behind
it feels so strong as if they are left unnoticed, unattended
to. Liked the write from start to finish…congrats on the win :)