by Renegade Angel May 25, 2011
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
Dream as if you can fly, and deceive all, |
by Mr. Darcy
Your use of the rhyme scheme, ABA throughout is a nice touch, as is the 10 syllables per line. To finish this piece with an extra 'A' rhyme was fitting to this thought-out form. |
by Moonlit Candles
This was really neat. Definitely got the imagination rolling. When I was reading this I could picture the night. Then "trying to fly through it but your senses fall" was really neat. Cause that's how it happens. Then I love the imagery of the ocean. Oceans are so vast and deep. And comparing them to rocking the person to sleep was really cool. All in all great job. :) |
by Xanthe
I really enjoyed reading this. I love the repeating lines, and imagery of this poem. |
by Burning Angel
This is amazing!! i love it alot!! |
by Amreen
A beautiful poem.... |