Comments : Forever Scars

  • 13 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I like the shortness of this write....as if the length of your scars cannot even begin to be described. My only suggestion would be to improve the flow, at first you have choppy lines that could have better punctuation maybe? Comma's instead of periods?
    Otherwise, simple, you didn't go into phenomenal depth or the detail of your story, but you could still see that surface of pain.

    God's blessings.