Be the piece of my being

Oh.... thank you so much.. :'( tears of joy

thank you thank you thank you soo much

Wow your a great writer !!!
i loved this :)
so true 5/5 Well done x

@NINA O: thanks for changing the grammar mistakes... i will do my best to change it.. thnk you for appreciating my poem.. :)

Hey! Your poem really shows how you feel and thats beautiful and a great start.

I fixed up some basic grammar mistakes:

I was sitting on the bench
Watching people walk by
Saying hi to my friends
But saying nothing to that someone

I can't control my eyes
As she slowly passes by
I want to say something
But I can't, I don't know why

My feeling for her
Are so different than others
To me, she's my my inspiration
During my exams and activities in school

Shouting I LOVE YOU is so weird
but it is just another way of expressing our feelings
To somebody that makes our lonely heart
happy and feel so special in our life..

I LOVE YOU is a strong phrase
But For me I LOVE YOU
Isn't just a phrase
But also a simple way of saying THANK YOU

Now, you should go over your poem, and try to create a stanza that rhymes, maybe every two lines, or so. Then your poem would be perfect! And maybe you can give it to this girl, I'm sure she will like it very much :)

Guys can i ask some favor... suggest anything about my poem.. like what is lacking what sentence have wrong grammar and etc.