As always your poems just brings out all the
emotions for the reader to touch. Thanks for
introducing a new form, looks interesting! Well done with the form as well the poem..take care.

Reading a poem from you after a long time and am glad that you are back.
Never heard of this form but as it seems...you did it with ease. Very nice write indeed.

all the best and take care

I have actually never heard of this style of poetry but I think I am going to get my hands a little dirty and pick up my pen! :D Anyway, your poem was full of emotions that are flowing throughout the poem in a sad tone and also your imagery in this poem is a gripping one as I got plenty of vividness throughout the poem. The rhyming was good as well and the poem flowed really good as well.

In all, this poem was really a creative story that has many different thoughts drifting across what you can take from this poem. I loved the message and also the emotions you poured into this poem! You are a very talented writer and I hope you continue to write more poems that portray your talent. Great job and keep writing!

Beautiful write and interesting form. :)

Impressive.

just optional suggestiosn:

I'd probably change "across" with "beneath" in this way, the image of rime and purple twilight is better "imagined".

That's all really. And maybe just the title and final line. "When time frowns" does seem forced overall the poem. I didn't expect that conclusion after the imagery you've formed in the piece. But that's not so hard to fix really.

Good job.

A beautifully sad poem. Loved this very much. Stale promises and time frowning - awesome. Excellent ideas you have here. Congrats on your win!

This is a very well written Trois-par-Huit

I feel you did really well with this piece it was short but said a lot. It deserves every comment it gets

loved it

5/5