Awesome!! This piece is strong, and interesting. I think you have done a fantastic job. It has emotion, description, thought, voice, strength, and a wonderful flow. The length is nice. You say so much, with such an impact with only a few simple stanzas, so excellent job there. It is very vivid and unique, at least to me. 5/5 from me.

Okay, this makes me giggle a bit, no offense. The image of someone walking around with balloons on a gun belt type thing over their shoulder. Sorry if that seems mean, but that made me giggle at the image that popped into my head when I read that.

I really liked how you were so creative in this poem. I definitely loved the vocabulary that was used in here.

I can definitely see your own style that has developed more in your newer pieces of writing. I must admit I love your own style in your newer poems, but I definitely see the progression from your older works to your works now.