Comments : My lighthouse

  • 13 years ago

    by Ramblings of an ageing Kid

    Well penned new friend picturing that feeling that you see everything falling apart and still do nothing about it ... It is a form of depression that you managed to convey to the reader here ... but I have a question really ...

    "My light house,
    Is the only thing standing,
    When all falls down,
    My lighthouse
    Was invincible,
    Or maybe I was in denial
    But, my lighthouse,
    was dimming out..."

    You started this part with the verb in present which implies that the light house is actually standing ... then afterwards you shifted to 'was invincible' which implies that this is not the case anymore despite the fact that it is still the only thing standing ... Did you actually mean something by that ??

  • 13 years ago

    by Aveena

    I used ;was; in past tense to sort of show that it was only in my eyes the lighthouse was still standing as I was the one in denial..makes sense or no? :$

  • 12 years ago

    by CryingHeart

    My light house,
    Is the only thing standing,
    When all falls down,
    Pretty Perfect for me ^_^ :) 5/5