by jescelle Jun 2, 2011
category :
Love, romance /
new love
Inside your kiss, I can't resist, |
by H E Losey
Stanzas one through four had me hooked and then you changed your rhyming technique. Those first four are so AWESOME!! Wish you would rework it and keep the rhyme going. I enjoyed the write even with the "let-down". It would have been a 6. |
by Jess
This Is So Beautiful, It Flows So Swiftly&Nice. |
Verycool! I like the way it is expressed in broken memory fragments, Great Job!:-) |
I felt like this was a beautifully wrapped present. With each line, you give a sweet reminiscence that won't leave your heart no matter what happens. The events, the imagery, the emotions that show such life here play a big part. |
by Britt
This had a very catchy and effortless seeming flow. What I like most is the pure, raw emotion here. The simple joys and feelings of love that inside are so complex. You've told little stories that were all wrapped together in beautiful memories and the butterfly moments we love to have and share with others. |