When Overdue

Why haven't I read this? :S

OMG.. amazing!!

I agree with Britt. A lot of people feel this every once in awhile and you did a good job of describing the pain. I love how you use imagery more again in this poem and how I can see what is going on. The emotion in your lines is sad and deffinetely can be felt.

I'm unequal in balance, unequal for logic,
such a modern cut of seasons,
a loose habit of being hesitant
like southern weathers,
craving for one religion.
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I liked the simile since I do live in the south and the weather is always changing! :P Though you may be talking about something else I still like how it matched up. :P Anyway this brought the poem into place and gave it good footing. As always I love your opening. :]

though complete and even in length
like a package of illegal cigarettes
that gives you shivers once the
flame is on, and a breath of relaxation
once it's over; tinted with lust.
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Again, I like the simile and I find it very useful where you have it and it makes a good point in this line. I think you are reaching a more mature state in your writing with the use of more poetic tools. Also the emotions are as always very gripping.

Belated, like my decisions,
hence I reap naught,
at the end of the year.
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And this was a wonderful ending that shows that when we constantly argue with ourseleve about something by the time we decide what we want to do we have lost the time to do it. I love the message of this last part. Really had a impact and was a wonderful closing. Great job and keep writing!

All in all, you have written another beautifully sad poem that speaks the heart of many people who can relate to your words. The poem shows you are growing more and more as a better poet with deeper writes and stronger emotions. Great job and keep writing!

I'm unequal in balance, unequal for logic,
such a modern cut of seasons,
a loose habit of being hesitant
like southern weathers,
craving for one religion.
^You express the same thought in so many different ways here, I liked how you did that. To just drive home the idea further. I particularly liked the reference to southern weathers, how they are not consistent and tend to jump all over the place, jumbled. Very similar to your emotions. Nice metaphor there.

ike a package of illegal cigarettes
that gives you shivers once the
flame is on, and a breath of relaxation
once it's over; tinted with lust.
^Loved this metaphor as well. It says quite a bit.

Lots of sadness in this poem. I can always relate to what you write. I love it.

This poem was very deep and thought-provoking. I agree with Britt's analysis, I perceived it very similarly. I love your use of words, and I loved the meaning of the poem... the idea of searching to feel a sense of belonging... It's a feeling many can relate to. I loved how all the emotions were not painted exactly, it kind of left the reader imagine and think about what is going on.

Great job my friend! :)

This strikes me as the typical feeling every person gets of trying to fit in. They have these thoughts, these feelings, and their actions, but they don't strike similarly with your other peers.

But I feel theres much more you are trying to say than what is on the surface. Like it's more of a battle within yourself, your heart and head are telling you two different things. You have unbalanced logic, and that is making your decisions about you and your future so much more difficult, because you don't feel you have the answers, and that you will make the wrong decision.

The second stanza makes me think you are tired of apologizing to someone. That you are you, and you don't want to apologize for it anymore, but no one seems to get that.

The end of the year bit is so symbolic. I think this is a strong ending, where so many people end the year thinking they will never make the same mistakes again, only to make them all over..lol.

I think poetically this speaks volumes, as I can grasp so much feeling and meaning throughout. I may be totally off base with my analysis, but I LOVE it. I love the idea of southern weather (I would take the s off). Here, the south is unpredictable with it's fires, tornadoes and hurricanes, so I thought it worked really well.

This is beautifully done!