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This is amazing, and I can really relate to it. Great job!

Great to see you writing again Benny. This poem held a lot of raw emotions and I really liked that about it. Keep writing. -Nik

You just pull the reader into your world with
this bundle of emotion write. From start to
finish it got my attention without having me to
stray. The past is a terrible thing that keeps haunting us...take care.

A vent? Talk about a out pour of emotions that completely overtakes the reader. I could so easily relate this to me in so many ways it was scary. Your heart beats deep sadness in every line and I love how you use some imagery in your line to give sight to your emotions and then you brought the poem to life with all that sadness in the lines. I liked how you had a strong central idea fro your poem and you stuck to it throughout the poem.

"Some days you feel it;
others, you pretend not to.
little things jog my memory;
nostalgia from within.
addictive pain;
memories of happiness.
letting them go free;
an impossible task.
killing yourself;
one memory at a time."

This was my favorite section and it made one powerful opening for the reader. It draws the reader into the poem with all your feeling coming as a torrent. Yet, it was steady and smooth in flow. Many people can relate to your words and you have describe what it feels like whenever you try to move forward but you are haunted by the past and sometimes we like to be hurt by the pain of the past even if only in memory.

In all, you did a great job at showing how you felt inside, which is important in a poem. You truly did pour out your heart and you did it in such a simplistic and powerful tone. This is defintely going on my nominated list! Great job and keep writing!

I loved this poem! its a really strong piece with a start that just pulls you in and keeps you interested all the way to the end. I have been moved by the emotionality of this poem.

5/5