Comments : Lost Forever

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenni

    Oh wow.. took me a bit to catch myself again, since this is so touching. Okay I'll start of with form/structure. The rhyme was well chosen, though the flow got interrupted in between, but that's alright. I also liked how your stanzas ended up getting shorter as you came closer to the end, pointed your final message out well ('I am always here for you')

    Now to the content: Simply stunning! It's a real heartfelt write and the emotion have been expressed well. It got to me. Thanks for sharing and keep up writing :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Jaison

    Oh aha yeah, thank you very much, I just write what my heart feels inside, so even it becomes confusing it's how I write poetry aha.

  • 13 years ago

    by Asia

    That was beautiful. If that poem was about an actual girl she better realize. Lol :)