So he fights to stay asleep
as I die to wake up,
^To me this symbolizes the idea that you both want different things and live two completely different lifestyles, I loved the little reference to night and day here. Great contrast of how things are different.

A very sad ending, knowing you're not meant for a certain someone because there's not that mutuality and nothing to hope for. It is definitely a choice that two people have to make. What is best for the both of them.

Great poem!

I particularly loved this poem the most of the other 4 you recently wrote ... really.

I related to part of it somewhat, however, I do not think stay asleep would be the best way to describe him ... Fall asleep would be more appropriate - you'll be describing two moving from across into the opposite direction, meeting then straying again ...

Another feeling that I felt was well portrayed through the flow of emotions is that you are really quite negative about it, more of indifferent. You neither feel like trying to stay asleep and see why he is fighting for it nor trying to make him accept the fact that he's awake.

Although it makes you feel sad, feels more comfortable.

I lovely read.

A* lovely read :))

Amazing depth in this thought prvoking poem