Comments : Clueless

  • 13 years ago

    by Britt

    Well, I think you are crazy for thinking I'm crazy that I like this. Did that make sense? It should. But you're clueless, so you never know.. lol

    The only thing I did not like about this poem was the beginning. It wasn't a strong beginning and was actually kind of confusing. I would start it this way:

    "I'm lost; writing-
    a puzzle left unsolved
    and the reasons don't
    exist."

    And get rid of the first three lines. It didn't seem relevant.

    I like the repetition of who asked you to read this etc, it gives the feel that you're writing for you, and if people don't like what you have to say, they can kiss your butt, because no one is holding a gun to their head.

    My favorite part of this whole poem:

    Hence I prepare a mug
    each single night to dress
    my late hours with more
    meaningless symbols
    and less effecting ones.

    I LOVE that bit, I thought it was so interesting and a great metaphor. How true it is.

    I like the ending how you try to say you don't want to be clueless anymore, but whoever is still reading this perhaps wants to stay clueless, maybe because it's easier. I love your poetry and the analogies and symbolism in it. Beautifully done... and the only reason I'm NOT nominating is because you asked me not to.

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    I can relate

  • 13 years ago

    by The Queen

    Congrats on the front page, well deserved, dear!

  • 13 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Nana, your poetry always blows me away. I like the idea of the writer and reader of this poem being 'clueless' and the repetition of 'why are you still reading this' made it interesting, as though the writer feels their expressions aren't worthy of being read or understood. That's the way I interpreted it, don't know if it makes sense. Congrats on the win :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Siglawoo

    Amazing !! something very new after a while.

    reading

    Now who asked you
    to even read this?

    i was like " really why am i reading this? "

    then

    Now who asked you
    to even continue reading?

    made me smile....

    and

    Now what are you still
    doing around such a verse-
    unless unlike me, you're trying
    to remain clueless.

    turned my smile into a wide clueless grin.. Loved it....

  • 13 years ago

    by xx stacy xx

    Beautifully writen. It shows that maybey being clueless is best in life. Because finding that one 'clue' can change a lot. This is more than words. It is truth.

  • 13 years ago

    by Kyra

    Nice Work very different.

  • 13 years ago

    by Jademark07

    Too bad

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    WHY HAVEN'T I READ THIS ? :P

    lool, it's lovely... definitely lft me clueless.