I love the very subtle rhyme that riddled throughout, though I can't tell if it was done intentionally or not, it gave a great rhythm and flow to the whole piece. Your words paint a vivid but abstract picture, and I feel like there is so much more than just the words to your poem.

I can't believe that this is a collaboration with another writer, your work is seamless, and I can't tell who wrote what, or that there was more than one brain to this piece. Wonderfully mastered.

All in all I love this piece of poetry and think it's brilliant. It's refreshing and modern and has a quirky style that is easy to pinpoint as greatness. Nominating this for sure :)

A very different read indeed. Each verse
stands on its own and it draes a vivid image within the reader's mind. I like the flow in this poem as well..very well done & congrats
on the win.

A good and refreshing read. I came across this while out in the sun and it sort of blended in with the scenery and the feel of summer. Loved it :)

This is without doubt one of the very best i have read in this forum. This is mature, developed, striking and leaves a memory.
Excellent