I love this! I love the play on words, and yes it is directly related to what we were talking about! You did such a great job with changing up the wording for specifics.

I love the second stanza with sun/son... that was brilliant and so soft. The ending absolutely broke my heart, and I can't stop reading this. Yaki this is gorgeous!

Yaki!

I adored the play on words within this poem sea/see, sun/son, whether/weather. They were all really clever and made the poem just that little more intriguing. I liked how you used such subtle comparisons to create the concept, it was deep and touched my heart many times, even though it was filled with sadness.

I agree with Britt, this is a poem you could read many times as it has the ability to evoke emotion within you and make you think. I found myself relating to this in many ways and you always manage to create poetry that is stunning and so very emotive.

"I finally understood
That I'd never become
The sea they wanted to see"

I adored the simplicity here, and even though the word choice was simple the thought behind it wasn't. Gorgeous lines.

Thank you for sharing, as always my pleasure to read.
-Mel.

WOOOOW your so talented that was such a pleasure to read thank you x