Very Very Good..
I like the spontaneous feelings you've poured within these verses..
It's like straight from the heart, and a reality lived!
The usage of 'They say...' is so attractive.. and the unified atmosphere is brilliant.
So deep and the pace was somehow good!

BUT
the structure is shaking.. It needs some changes
'Lots of "the" are used.. when they shouldn't'
and I feel that there is no coherence..

Some makeover, and this would be worth a nomination!
4/5 :D

Amazing..this touched me a lot, this speaks to me a lot, and hits home like nothing has lately.
am at loss of words , cause am in a storm of emotions after reading this..

well done guys..
very truthful and..sad.
5/5