Like a fair current, arousing to declare
the loss of random evenings
by schedule, not occasion
by routine, not chance.
^^
these few lines just hit me soooooo deep, tgey were my favoirite .. Once again you shine in everything you write ..

Keep it up sweetie :)
5/5 and a nomination ..

I approach onward; leisurely
^This seemed awkward for some reason, why not just use a word that means to walk leisurely? Like 'amble' perhaps? 'I amble like a pure ray...' Plus it sounds much more poetic in a sense. Just my opinion of course.

Fresh wind seldom creep
^'I'd change 'wind' to 'winds'

though shimmering but-I have to
^Remove 'but-' here and place with a comma.

Apart from a few grammatical things, I thought you penned such an emotive piece here. The ending really hit me the hardest, it felt very depressing. To feel like you don't know if you, sunshine, remains within you anymore is such a sad feeling. The personification in this piece of you being sunshine felt so natural, after all you have always been known to bring happiness to a lot of people's lives, hopefully that light continues to shine, I'm sure it still exists in there somewhere, you just have to find it. :) Lovely poem.

I don't even know what to say...I have no idea what I could or should comment...I'm just nominating this... I guess that says it all..... :)!

"clouds gather to bath"

bath should be bathe :)

"I approach onward in slow
motion like a pure ray"

I would put a comma after motion. Give it a little breathing room, otherwise the chunk of the stanza feels like there is no natural pause.

"the pace of time, that runs out"

I would eliminate the comma after time here. It gives it an awkward pause. Either that or take out "that" and make "runs" "running".

"Fresh winds seldom creep
around curious if I still exist,"

I would also put a comma after "around" here. Reading it out loud it doesn't have the natural pause, and a comma would lead to that affect.

I really like your ending in the bit of shimmering even though you are unsure. It gives that "silver lining" to cloud idea :)

I also like the colors here, it gives it a vibrant twinge with orange and ginger.

I really adore the opening here, though I don't feel this is as sad as it probably seems to other people. I think it's airy but full of depth. It's beautiful :)

Wicked awsome poetry, so heart felt, so real, so visionable, (I know, not a word, but this poem deserves that word)
a 5/5 indeed mam. keep writting, and I'll keep reading.

From the PoetryKnight

Aww wow... Nana as always your poetry touches me! First, I love how many of your titles and topics of your poetry are relevant to your username. And I loved the description and even though the ending was so sad, I was affected and was analyzing the poem in my head... Well done my friend :)