The princess and the pauper

by Yakari Gabriel   Jul 5, 2011


You'll never know
about picking apples..
when you were the
one eating them..

while,
I was the sun..

and-
you the moon..
Perhaps,more beautiful..
Perhaps,more loved..

I lived in the forest,
among those
who were free like me

you however,

never knew of
peace within your castle walls

while I chased food,
and you chased freedom..

you too,
became a dreamer like me..

But I was sage,

and you ignorant..

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  • 13 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Yaki!

    Did you also write this one for my challenge? It has the concept of a fictional character and also uses Sage which is what led me to believe you did. I really enjoyed this, and loved your simplistic words choice mixed with a deeper thought-provoking meaning.

    I adored the way you ending this poem, it had a strong impact. The poem itself was very beautiful and I never expected the word 'Ignorant' to be able to work well with such beauty but it did.

    I suggest in the first line you don't need a comma after 'know' it seems to flow better without such a pause.

    The 'Perhaps,more' should read 'Perhaps, more

    & also you should capitalize after your full stops so the grammar is correct. Apart from those such things the idea
    behind this poem I loved and I thought it was quite clever.

    Lovely to read as always, thanks for sharing.
    -Mel.

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