Yaki!

Did you also write this one for my challenge? It has the concept of a fictional character and also uses Sage which is what led me to believe you did. I really enjoyed this, and loved your simplistic words choice mixed with a deeper thought-provoking meaning.

I adored the way you ending this poem, it had a strong impact. The poem itself was very beautiful and I never expected the word 'Ignorant' to be able to work well with such beauty but it did.

I suggest in the first line you don't need a comma after 'know' it seems to flow better without such a pause.

The 'Perhaps,more' should read 'Perhaps, more

& also you should capitalize after your full stops so the grammar is correct. Apart from those such things the idea
behind this poem I loved and I thought it was quite clever.

Lovely to read as always, thanks for sharing.
-Mel.