Comments : Time Can Be So Evil

  • 13 years ago

    by Britt

    YOU SUCK, LU! You wrote with all seven of the words, and I definitely could NOT come up with modegreen or whatever the word was. LOL. You wrote this with ease and effort, or so it seems from this side of the poem :) It's beautiful and has such a story here. I've read this a few times, I just love it!

  • 13 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Lu,

    This was a lovely poem and I expect no less from you. You know that you can touch my heart and did so many times throughout.
    I don't know how you managed to use all Seven words but you did it so naturally and I was particularly fond of 'Mondegreen' and the way you used it, very clever and creative.

    "I would silent
    the "s" in days
    and sprinkle ebullience
    upon stars,"

    I thought this was elegant, I never would of thought to write a letter just like you did with the 's' here, it was different, unique and I enjoyed the concept behind it. It all flowed beautifully together here.

    I also adored your use of 'Areion' you have been doing your research ;) You also picked the smelling I would of for the word seeing as it can be spelt Arion also. I loved the incorporation of such a creature and even though it was part of the requirement it too seemed very natural.

    The ending was perfect, it is true they say time can do great things for someone but it can also do the complete opposite but always time is the answer, whether we like the answer or not.

    A great poem and you rocked the challenge with it.
    -Mel.

  • 13 years ago

    by AngelDust

    This made me cry.. It struck something within me and this piece is amazing! The title is brilliant and you speak of nothing but truth in this. Time can be so evil.. The wording you used is excellent and the structure of this is fantastic. I adore this piece!

  • 13 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    Lu,
    Its been a while since I've read something by you.
    And again I am amazed..
    With a little help from my dictionary app on my phone *wink*.. I could manage
    To grasp the meaning of this poem.
    You are,as creative..as can possibly be...
    Such elegance and exquisite language..
    If I had to choose my favorite part
    It is most defintley this one..

    If only time
    could fly with Areion,
    and elision
    could play in time;
    I would silent
    the "s" in days

    ^
    & I wonder,how can one be so clever..

    Amazing lu!!

    - hugs!