Comments : Move with Me

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    I liked this poem a lot I found it to be very sweet and very deep however that said I felt you let the poem down with the last line:
    "And screw me
    On the couch"

    I feel you could have worded your ending better and give the poem more feeling

    anyway that aside I liked the poem and over all I thought you did well