Want to know what got me here? It was the title you chose for the poem. It's mysterious and got me curious. That curiousity had to be satisfied by reading your piece. I do not think that the title tells too much and i think it fits really well.

The rhymes itself aren't too obvious and well chosen, though the flow could be better. If it was more continious it would make the rhymes even better.
Maybe you purposely interrupted the flow because it fit to the substance, if that is the case I may take my word back. ;)

I like your choice of words and the way you tell the story. I was able to follow what you said and build up an imagination. To me the ending wasn't predictable, which is always good. All in all i think this poem is good.

I agree with Jenni. She said few right things.

other than the rhymes, I didn't really think that the punctuation is well-placed, you didn't capitalize your "i"s, and some commas were needed too.

but it was a good piece, made me feel warm! :)

Good choice of words touching and sweet ur really good keep writing coz ur so unqie and creative with ur poems :)

I love the story of these rings.