by Britt
This is almost too in depth for someone outside of the circle to really grasp at the emotions. I mean of course we can feel the emotions and the sadness, and we can see them very clearly, but I think there is more to it that we can't understand unless we are truly there. |
by Meme
I try to define him through his |
Wonderful merger imagry: |
My heart |
This poem was definitely very personal in many ways. Referring to someone by their homeland is brilliant, it's the one thing that can tell you so much about someone. |
Everything about these personal emotions were touching in so many ways....the way you passionately showed this person as their homeland is real.....the brilliance of this piece isn't in the look of it but the feel, how you are so adamant on showing us the true side of him, a part of you now, a homeland of your heart that won't leave or say goodbye just 'cause you're separated. |
by nouriguess
When I first read the title, I though WHAT THE HELL? Nana wrote about India, LOL. but it was in the sadness section and that soothed the shock :P after I read the opening...I was totally amazed, like totally amazed, like I couldn't even imagine how passionate and 7essese you are, how you wrote about two people loving each other, as if you have the same emotions and the same passion and the geat ability to portray such a wonderful piece. you names some seas that surround India and that made it more interesting, and then you said this: |
Forever not getting enough of this poem....this is like the 10th time I'm here... |
by The Queen
It is a very emotional piece and is sure to elicit a response from every reader especially those who have loved and lost. Technically, this will not be of high regard by critics, due to its odd structure, intermittent line/scene execution, and overtly dramatic delivery (though I must admit, I.m a fan of it) and the overuse of these words "India" and "color". I really like this piece, and the tone this poet had in writing it, very moving all the same time. The last stanza gives off the feeling of hopefulness, though a bit confusing due to its figure of speech being used, "to carve a new India" almost like moving on for a new love. Overall, I could feel that this poet was pouring her heart out while penning this piece. |
by The Queen
It is a very emotional piece and is sure to elicit a response from every reader especially those who have loved and lost. Technically, this will not be of high regard by critics, due to its odd structure, intermittent line/scene execution, and overtly dramatic delivery (though I must admit, I.m a fan of it) and the overuse of these words "India" and "color". I really like this piece, and the tone this poet had in writing it, very moving all the same time. The last stanza gives off the feeling of hopefulness, though a bit confusing due to its figure of speech being used, "to carve a new India" almost like moving on for a new love. Overall, I could feel that this poet was pouring her heart out while penning this piece. |
by TotaMariee
This poem is just epic. I havent read a piece like this in a while. |
by Half Husband Half father
Wow woow u're a very emotional person, so thats y love india u knw wat sunshine u're a nice girl.. God bless u |
Superb...loved it ...from Amritsar to Bay of Bengal |
by Decayed
So heartfelt.. |
by Lonely Rider
I was pleasantly surprised when I started reading the poem... more becasue i was expecting you to describe the country... |
There is so much more to this , it's but a piece of the heart. I feel it's much deeper then us as a reader can relate too. But I loved every word, and the emotions it evoked in me. Beautifully done in every way. Super |
Nice poem...Actually i began to understand your poem only after reading the comments it got...Very artistic way of portraying your feelings....Take care.... |
Wow... amazing! I loved it... I loved how the title and the content of the poem is way different than I expected as the reader... I love your metaphors, you just pen emotions so beautifully. A well-deserved win my friend! :) |
by Decayed
CONGRATS on the win. |
by silvershoes
Do you know that my boyfriend is Indian? This poem carefully defines my sentiments and the heartache my boyfriend and I go through, and the inner battles we face alone. It is so hard to love someone from a different culture, especially when their family is inflexible and hellbent on tradition. Anyway, before I start rambling... love the poem, it touched me deeply. You have such a wonderful way with words. My one complaint is the poem ended way too soon, I was ready to be taken on a much longer journey if you had given me the words to read. |