Comments : Fresh Air

  • 13 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    This write reminds me of a book called co-dependent no more. It is about standing on your own though the love (family too) in our life keeps bringing us down, we have to strive to be independent. No longer depending on the outcome of what you know will happen, because it usually is bad.

    Sometimes the only way we can breathe is when we remove ourselves from a situation.
    I love how you brought this out even among the dislikes you have mentioned.

    I think there is one small mistake in the poem though, I believe you may have meant "while" instead of "well" in this line....

    "It is funny how things have play out
    You're laughing well I scream and shout"

    Besides that the poem was a much enjoyable read.

  • 13 years ago

    by PoetryKnight

    Love it, time goes by, things happen, and some one gets into a rut, and changes for the worst instead of for the better, a true poem indeed, and happenes every day to people every where. a poem of perfection.
    Definatly a collab of sophisticated, and elegant masterpice writting, over all, WICKED AWSOME POEM DUDET!!! keep it real, and keep writting, and I'll keep reading

    From the PoetryKnight, who is the new member of M&M. a 5/5 indeed

  • 13 years ago

    by Ryu

    Short but sweet and to the point. The end of a relationship is always painful.. You sit and wait and wait hoping it gets better but deep down you see no true light at the end of the tunnel.

    That is what I get from this work of art.

    PS - Thank you for your comment on my work. I always enjoy those :). But no - none of it is made up. I always find a way to surrender to her eyes and false lies of "wanting" me. But that is life I suppose...
    Keep up the work of art you have here <3