Comments : Someday

  • 13 years ago

    by Meme

    Well, I love it, what else should I say ..

    Someday I will discover
    how to rest dignified,
    proud, dear
    as you expect me not.
    ^^
    I love the confident in those lines, kinda empowering :)

    Mature like a lady
    not like this girl
    that you enjoy
    her giggles-
    no more.
    ^^
    I know how that feels, treat me like a woman not like a little girl ..

    Will give up on
    the random
    kid you glimpse
    in me.
    ^^
    Thats so intense, giving up that part of yourself ..

    My sweet mistakes,
    and my young faults,
    will lose color,
    tense,
    and vanish.
    ^^
    I loved how you described your mistakes in this way ..

    Then we will
    switch regret,
    with each other.
    ^^
    What an amazing ending ..

    This poem is like a gentle breeze on a summer day ..
    5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    A extremely different write but most enjoyable. Worded in knowledge tinged with truth. Super

  • 13 years ago

    by Britt

    This is a great example of growing up. When we're young, we have less cares, responsibility, we tend to have more fun and laugh more (sadly this SHOULD carry on into adulthood). But in adulthood we change, we turn into mature adults (hopefully). We have stresses we didn't have as kids, on top of our emotions and working on and building relationships. It can become tiresome, and you pointed that out perfectly here :)

    I love your fourth stanza, I thought that held the strongest point for me, or at least the most interest :D I love how you say they will lose color, "tense" - love the use here.

    Overall this is an awesome piece. Short, simple and to the point, with so much depth and emotion. :)