Maiden

It seems like you've grown in your metaphors while I was away. :) I liked the whole feeling of the stars and seasons in this poem. It's classical but it serves the poem well, as it's a perfect way to illustrate birth. After all it's some sort of destiny and a thing of nature. Very beautiful.

The opening lines immediately drew me in. The thought of two stars colliding to become one is such an elegant way of describing cells mashing together to create Yaki, lol. The reference to months was well thought out. I assume that you were still a "seed" in September and became a "fruit" in January. I liked that you chose fruit instead of something like a flower, because a fruit directly reminds us of vitality.

"unplanned,
but welcomed.."
^ I'm not sure whether this was necessary. I can understand that it has meaning for you, having heard the stories of your mother, but I think it doesn't add much emotion for the reader. There would be a greater impact if you just jumped to the September part. But that's totally up to you. After all this is a very personal poem, so you should place words that make sense to you. After all, it's you having undergone this birth.

I liked how you used the verb that defines us as "big kids" in the next stanza: walking. It lets us know that you're talking about your path in life. I can really feel you here because, again, I've heard your stories back in RTVW. =p But if I hadn't know you, I think this stanza would be the weaker one compared to the following one. It's because of the simile you places there. I think it's clever to refer to season again, and to tie this season to yourself.

After this, the poem seems to take a turn with the announcement of the rooster. It becomes something more direct but also magical. Selene (mythology), the raged mother (fairytales) and being abducted (mythology) ... I liked it all. Although you might want to expand on the idea of Selene, as I'm not very sure why you referred to her. Surely she's the Goddess of the Moon, but what is the symbolism in sharing the moon with her? Perhaps you're trying to say that you're sharing your loneliness with the night/moon, because you couldn't do this with your real mother? It would be nice if the reader knew more about it. :)

Anyway, I could ramble on and on about everything but I'll keep it short because I might be talking too much now. ;)

As always, I enjoy your emotions, your tone, and your creativity. Just be more careful with them, realise whether some things are unnecessary or necessary. What things would keep the reader interested, what would make them confused? Etc. etc.

Keep writing. :)