Comments : The Tabloid Killer

  • 13 years ago

    by Liliana

    Absolutely love it, the intensity, the irony in his words, the best poem to describe Jack Ripper`s mind indeed Good Job 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenni

    First of all I'd like to suggest some changes:

    -quite in the first stanza should be quiet
    -I'd put a comma into this verse: I had no regrets, I will never feel scared
    -In the last stanza you wrote no rather than know :P

    I think it wasn't a bad idea to go into detail with a specific case and then write a more general part. The fact that this has actually happened makes it even scarier than it already is from your writing. I thought you described the person right and the feelings he has. I could imagine that is how he felt when doing what he did. I liked your choice of words, they made the speaker seem really confident about what he did, which he has to be.

    I think things like these should never be forgotten, which people who lived during that time or even 20 years later probably never will.

  • 13 years ago

    by Heather

    This is very good :) nice and detailed...it creeped me out but in a good way lol

    I have a poem like this too, gruesome yet awesome

    5/5 i really love it

  • 13 years ago

    by DirtRoadGirl

    I got shivers. You are really amazing 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    This was a heart pounding write. Well executed and full of anticipation. Super
    Connie

  • 13 years ago

    by The Queen

    Ok, I'd like to start first with your typos.

    No one is prepared for what there about to endure

    ^ they're

    A women walks past I'm about to end her dreams

    ^ A woman

    To be the last thing they see, hear them take there last breath.

    ^their

    Wow, I'm glad you've posted this, I wasnt aware, you write dark such as this. I think, this is one of the best Ive ever read from you. I loved how you arrange a series of events into a logical order so as to create the story from beginning to end perfectly. The ending was unbelievably great. Great job, Tony!

  • 12 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    You done a fantastic job. Jack the Ripper will always be remembered throughout history and this piece done it justice. You captured his thoughts and emotions wonderfully.

  • 11 years ago

    by Marcy Lewis

    YES. I was wondering when I was going to read a specific piece of yours about Jack The Ripper. He had to have been one of, if not the, world's first serial killers. I used to read about him incessantly, and it's never failed to disgust and fascinate me.

    "You will never know who I am, you will never see my face
    But you will always remember me I will never be erased"

    ^And that is totally awesome. It's sick and disturbing that we don't know who he is. So trippy.

    Awesome write.