It was so fun working with youuuu :D

And our gem (quoting you) is lustrously shimmering!!

You two are really amazing, you should do another collab right away! :)
Abed, you have a very wild imagination, and a great potential, you write with passion, and MarryAnne, I have read a couple of your writes, you seem to be a very talented writer, and I enjoyed reading them actually, I loved the darkness throughout the piece, something that is a little mysterious and kind of depressing, I was touched by the awesomeness of the descriptions that you both mastered with. :)
but, I am not sure about the title at all, I guess it is too simple and it isn't that captivating which is not expected, for I know that both of you are creative and you can easily come up with something much better :)

-I LOVED the "ebony voices" part, it was such a dark profound metaphor, and it said so much, and it was great to start the opening with it. At first, I didn't get the whole meaning, I had to read it twice, but then I grasped something! :) and also, I could see that the wording was strong but I believe there were few words which aren't much needed, and you could drop it, but it is just my thought :)

"The sun couldn't stop this urgency
leaving me in intricacies
of a thousand black hearts-"

Of course, that was my favorite part of the poem, I couldn't help but add this piece to my favorites, although "black hearts" is over-repeated but I loved it here for it was well-placed, it made the flow even more perfect. :)

"I am just a victimized willow."

I too love this line! I honestly had to open the dictionary twice or three times I guess, because there are few words that I couldn't understand, that proves how strong the wording was, my only suggestion would be to remove some adjectives, there were too many adjectives. :)
-The ending left me speechless, and it was really well-written :) a very successful collab, great job for both of you! keep writing together.

With Love. :)

Some poets just click, they flow together like streams into the ocean. You two are just like that, your flow and oneness created brilliance.
Super write
Connie

PERFECT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
MAGNIFICO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I really loved this poem, and those three words say it all. 5/5 all the flippen way!!!!!!!

-AJ

Oh my gosh! lol I can't even express how those words flowed with so much efficiency! It's so complex yet so simple, and I love the use of metaphors! Definitely one of my favorite poems ever!