My Love Story

Yeah i'm studying english too, so maybe there's some gramatic mistake. btw, thanks

Just that it was grammatically incorrect in some parts thats all but its a great piece

Thanks for your suggestions, i'll try better next time. (y)

Its a lovely story..i tried making those suggestions for you...

I've been wlking through the desert
i was lost and had nowhere to go
then suddenly i heard someone calling
the voice came from behind
i turned around to see who it was
nobody was there and i wondered where it had come from
i started to walk again but i could still hear the voice
i looked back once again and found an old paper
i was surprised at what i saw on the paper
it was a treasure map but am not sure because i dont know of its origins
thus i embarked on my journey to seek out the truth
the journey was terrible
i fell many times, got hurt by bad weather
and injured myself
blocked by a complicated path
and managed to escape from traps while i fought monsters on my way
but i prevailed and reached my destination
where i found a beutiful treasure box which i opened
i was filled with happiness because of the treasure i had found
the map was indeed true
for i will now live happily ever after
this story expresses my true love story
from the start to the end,
it has told of my journey to have you as mine
i hope you understand and make my story come true.......

was just to edit it for you, hope you like my suggestions