Candid

by AlaSkA   Jul 19, 2011


Do you remember the day
That everyone was
Dead or dumb?
That cat whose ninth life
lived out on tilt
A Story time sovereign
Tells ancient anecdotes
Full of jaded jokes
And left hooks crammed with quarters
Proselytizing on the soap box
Wondering why his sign language
Always falls on deaf ears
With a suitcase full of silver trophies
So polished they'd blind you

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  • 13 years ago

    by Jess

    Great Poem!!!! Nice Work!!
    5/5 :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    ^Agreed :)
    The only thing I will add is to remove the capital letters at the beginning of the lines. They are not needed and really do not fit into the easy eyes.

    Love
    Tara

  • 13 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Hey there!
    I remember you asked me for m opinions about your writes, right? and here I am givin them! :)
    and in my opinion, this piece is something worth a nomination and is going to be nominated the next week, so everyone can read it! :)

    Do you remember the day
    That everyone was
    Dead or dumb?
    That cat whose ninth life
    lived out on tilt
    ^^^

    that is sooo well-expressed and I so love it.
    a very nice opening, though the poem was short but it made me feel inspired. :)

    there are some metaphors that I didn't really understand, I will PM you asking 'bout them...;)

    five and a nomination!