Generally it was gud bt i think u can do better.i wasnt too hit by ur words.it sounded lyk u jst wntd to reali write smtin down.u can do better as i initially said

Its really cute and supportive, and comforting to know there is someone by your side, sometimes we might think we are surrounded by people but we dont actually know what they feel or think and its just nice to know we have someone next to get by. I could use someone supportive like this at this time of my life, and thats what this poem remenbers us. 5/5

See lil,this is wt i ws tryin to tel u,dt ppl care abt us & jenni is one of d gud one..
And no josep i dnt agree wid u,i mean js luk at d feel ,seems like smone realy speakin to our hrt ,my hrt..& lil ur one too..
Excellent ..5/5

Im not gonna say its your best because ive got a few favs :P but how can somone say u can do better this is stright from the heart so caring kind and beautiful i think it is a excelent write x 5/5

Have just read all your poems and would like to say how much your writing has changed since the 1st poem you put on here. I also love the way you use different styles and structures but still make all your poems fab =) hope to see more soon

Hey Jen! :)

this is sooo sad and straight from your heart...and you know? it wasn't complicated at all! and that is great! I loved the word choice though it is -in my opinion- too simple, and maybe some expressions are cliche, but yeah they were heartfelt. :)

Hey there dear, are you okay?
Be honest, I'll figure anyway.
Don't lie, tell the truth and reply.

^^
hey, this is a little bit choppy?
I would make the last line like this:

"Don't lie, tell the truth when you reply"
and pleaaaase do not capitalizeeeee the first letterss, lol. I get so confused...:)

I can hear all the silent screams
You have nightmares rather than dreams.
I will stand by you, my word is true.

^^^
this is so soft! :)
and romantic ....
anddd the rhyme scheme is wonderful! :)

I can not stand to see you cry
You feel this way I wonder why.
You can rely on me, don't you see?
^^^

"can not" should be "cannot" :)

The way you hurt yourself, hurts me too
This I will help you go through
Don't give up please, search for release.
^^^^
I would add "some" before "release", how bout that? ;)
the 2nd line was a little shorter than the rest, so the flow wasn't that good here.

If you need me I will be there
Do not worry I'll take care
Smile, stay happy for a while

^^^
I really think this is smooth....and so pure.
good job!
and the ending was lovely too.
I'll rate this 5......but know that you can do better, little flower ;);) take care and keep writing.

This is such a sweet poem I hope people read this and feel the same way I did.

It was an excellent piece

5/5

I thought this was an awesome message to someone that needs help. I won't try to make suggestions or pick apart any of it, I can tell it's from the heart
Connie

This is nice

I concur with above comments - minor adjustments are possible, but not critical. I think you will find that many of your own favorites with me the pieces that experience the most experimentation/tweaking over time. I in beautifully written, touchingly sweet, and pleasantly simple. Well done!

Wow!! This is amazing!! It is sweet and reassuring for someone to hear. Magnificent job!!

Jenni, It's nice to know that you are a good friend, I know why you wanted me to read this and I thank you,
take care
you are amazing girl
love
T
xxx