Comments : Bargain

  • 13 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    Oh there are so many that sell themselves with a perfect smile and charming attitude :-) Women tend to be suckers, but only because we are optimistic , giving others the benefit of the doubt.
    Well said indeed
    Connie

  • 13 years ago

    by White Orchid

    I thought this poem conveyed an honest idea. I loved the second stanza where it says a charmer can sell you dirt under your shoes. It reminded me that all of us have been gullible at one point or another and it usually comes back to hurt us. I also liked how you conveyed the emotion of being uncertain about trusting that person. Very nice write and i loved how you conveyed the emotions!

  • 13 years ago

    by Chelsey

    A charmer can sell you
    dirt under your shoes.
    He chooses the value
    and sells it with his smile

    ^^ I enjoyed this part :) Very creative and so true.
    I think this poem is so relatable if you stop and think about it.. Persuasive people are ones to watch out for when it comes to selling something ,offering something, borrowing something, etc. I thought this was a good subject to write about :) I enjoyed it

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenni

    You give me a special offer,
    one that no one could beat.
    It would be a shame to pass
    a great deal well-presented.

    ^ I think that this is a well written introductory stanza because it gives the reader an idea of what you're refering too. I also like the fact that you're not exactly telling what the offer is; that made me really curious and kept me captivated.

    A charmer can sell you
    dirt under your shoes.
    He chooses the value
    and sells it with his smile.

    ^ This is so true, if people know what others like to hear then it's really easy to make them like you. I think that you worded this very well and it shows how much a smile can do.
    I really enjoyed how the rest of the poem is filled with doubt and it encourages the reader to think. The poem flows really good, lenght is fine too and I loved the message.