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by Tara Kay
I have a few pointers which i hope may help, stear away from the same word, the word wait in the first lines is confusing, maybe "It seems I am waiting, forever i must wait, neverending" The rhymes were simple, and common therefore not too effective. However there is potential so keep writing, love always, Tara-Kay
And also, use punctuality, the poem will flow alot better if you use comma's and full stops. xxxx Tara-Kay