Comments : Words

  • 13 years ago

    by Reaper

    I really felt that poem simply amazing!

  • 11 years ago

    by Masked metaphor

    Why do my words hurt so many but help so few?
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    I really love the technique of beginning with a question to introduce your thoughts as well as bring the reader in, this question really applies to my life and I'm sure it applies to so many people, you have worded this so well!

    Why do my lips have to work faster than my brain?
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    The lips and mouth always cause problems there is a great reading in the bible that talks about the taming of the tongue in the epistle of James chapter 3 it's a great read and this question you have raised reminded me of it!

    They humor and comfort but tend to cut and bruise.
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    I like the linkage and characteristics you have given to the troubles the tongue has caused it brings it to life and emphasises the impacts it has caused you and makes it clear to the readers.

    They blister and ooze insults that take too long to heal,
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    I like the words used here - blister and ooze insults a great symbolism that has vivid images composed upon reading them.

    yet they continue to flow like Niagara Falls, not caring who they spray.
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    I like the link to niagra falls and it's a beautiful composition from the last line from blister and oozing insults to waters of a natures waterfall - great description!

    I guess my victims should keep on their raincoats at all times
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    Nice way to link the people involved to the last line. I like this link effect you have utilised as it allows the structure to flow easily and allows the reader to have an easy read!

    Maybe I should make a sign that says: "Warning: what you will hear may not be pleasant to your heart."
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    I can relate to this, sometimes we harm people without intention and when we realise the problems we have caused its too late and the wounds and damage have already been inflicted.

    Maybe then, I wouldn't have to worry about the eggshells cutting my feet.
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    I like the used of egg shells here it is very relevant and inputs great imagery to what you are trying to get across.

    Maybe then, I wouldn't have to tame my tongue so harshly.
    Or maybe that's the whole trouble in the first place...
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    I like the way you have ended this with a feel of reasoning and justifying why things have occurred the way they have, almost like you are trying to reach conclusions yet still searching to answer the unanswered questions life bring you.

    I loved reading this!
    5/5 from me

  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    The whole message that I interpret from this poem is "think before you speak". Unfortunately, I have the same problem as you, I speak some very cruel, vindictive words out of anger sometimes...that I always regret. It's like I have no filter, lol. I think many people can relate to this, as well.

    I like the questions at the beginning, it draws the reader in...but I really love the metaphor of the Niagara Falls! I was like "wow, that's really great!"