Comments : Without You

  • 13 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    I loved this! This shows how harsh love can be. I liked the way you explained your situation and how it showed a mixture of feelings of rage, sadness and self-pity. It has depth to it and a perfect flow... The only thing I would ask you to change here is the spacing; put your poem into stanzas so that it becomes more like a poem in it's organization.