by firdaus Aug 3, 2011
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
Beautiful day and a beautiful time |
by firdaus
Thanks for the comment.. try my best to improve my future poems |
by Mello193
How does it end? seems like you should put another stanza to finish it, sometimes there was in-proper grammar and sometimes the rhyme scheme seemed a little forced. but overall i enjoyed this. very nice |