Comments : We are the Elements

  • 13 years ago

    by Meme

    One of the best nature poems I ever read. I loved how you gave each element its own character and description. Well done.

    My next weeks nomination for sure 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    My name is Wind,

    When I'm happy I'll bring a calm and cool breeze,
    I do this to keep your mind at ease.

    ^I like the introduction of this poem. You have given Wind a character and allowing the element to speak its mind and yes the cool calm breeze does keep the mind at ease.

    When I'm angry, trust me you'll know,
    Cause I'll run through your town in the form of a Tornado!

    ^This reminds me of the time when I and my family were caught in one while living in the US..a scary moment.

    My name is Earth,

    I give you the ground, on which you stand,
    Happy I remain as couples walk hand in hand.
    Anger me and the ground will break,
    As I give your city an unnatural earthquake!

    ^I like the subtle rhyme scheme you have used here and I also like how you let the elements point out their good as well as bad side of nature...just like any human being!

    My name is Fire,

    You cuddle with a loved one next to me to stay warm,
    Put me out with water keep others from harm.
    Piss me off and my flames will grow and spread,
    If I get close enough I'll fry you until you're dead

    ^This one made me laugh but and at the same time shows the seriousness as well as the dangers of this element..liked it!

    My name is Water,

    Cool and refreshing is what I am and how I stay,
    You can drink me or just jump in and play.
    Angering me would make it a very bad day,
    Cause when I'm mad I'll send a flash flood your way!

    ^The one think that quenches our thirst can also kill us one day. Imagine an element so calm and soothing can turn violent..just like a human!

    Overall, an interesting nature poem that has been given a character of its own which highlights its good and bad side. At the rate things are happening around the world one day nature will not be able to take it and will unleash all its elements together! I like how you have ended the poem with a warning. Enjoyed this read :)