Comments : Dream Chasing

  • 13 years ago

    by BlueJay

    Wow!! This is absolutely amazing!!! I love it!!

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenni

    You started this poem really well because the first two verses encourage the reader to think and makes them curious, wondering whether your poem will be the answer.

    "always coming close
    yet I come up short"

    ^ I think that this is really powerful and underlines the message that things that may sound similar can be really different.

    "Is this how, my, life shall be?"

    ^ This was my personal favorite part. It's meaning is somewhat obvious and easy to understand yet as easy as understanding this question may be it is even tougher to find the right answer.

    Flow and rhyme were great and you really had me captivated by how you played with the words and language.

  • 13 years ago

    by Brianna

    Im absoulutly in love with thiss !

  • 13 years ago

    by Brianna

    Im absoulutly in love with thiss !

  • 13 years ago

    by Kips2.0

    You're pretty good with words. Well fashioned and good message.

  • 13 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    I really loved this poem and enjoyed reading it :) great flow great rhyme and wording is good :) fantastic job :) 5/5
    My favorite parts:
    is this how, my, life shall be?
    is this what's destined for me?

    running around,
    endless in my mind it seems,
    always coming close
    yet I come up short,

    Once again I loved it :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This was really good a clever way to propose thinking for the reader. The idea of dream chasing and chasing dreams being turned into 2 different things is very good and you done well to write about this.

    The ending was like you are at a place in your life where you want to give up, perhaps you are having no luck with a certain dream you have been chasing? Don't give up, dreams are only dreams if we chase them.

    Nice work!