by Snickerpie Aug 9, 2011
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
She says she's fine. |
by No1ButMe
The rhyme scheme threw me off a bit, but it had a strong ending. I loved the repetition. It's a very common and relatable subject. One that never gets old. Another good piece. |
I love the title, very catchy and you want to read it. Which is the first of many ways to lure someone to enjoy your work. |
Love this girl...i love everything you write, you can just feel what you feel so much and u can relate to it. every girl says "Oh, im fine" when truthfully there not. 5/5 <3 |
by Tara Kay
I can really relate to this. it brought a tear to my eye as I felt like I was reading about myself. Although the first few lines were slightly forced and the flow kept breaking but ended well. Loved the title though. |