I can really relate to this. it brought a tear to my eye as I felt like I was reading about myself. Although the first few lines were slightly forced and the flow kept breaking but ended well. Loved the title though.
your friend, Tara-Kay x

Love this girl...i love everything you write, you can just feel what you feel so much and u can relate to it. every girl says "Oh, im fine" when truthfully there not. 5/5 <3

I love the title, very catchy and you want to read it. Which is the first of many ways to lure someone to enjoy your work.
You wrote about something everyone can relate too and did it in a very professional way. Excellent

The rhyme scheme threw me off a bit, but it had a strong ending. I loved the repetition. It's a very common and relatable subject. One that never gets old. Another good piece.