Tiny fingers

This is a wonderful, sad and all too true piece. I actually teared up. I can't begin to imagine how hard it was for you to write with. The sad truth is that a lot of the families that have fallen victim to the ruthless, idiocriacy ( or however it's spelled ) of child rapist and murders never find closure from it because they can't lay their child to rest. This was again, a wonderful piece. ((5))
~Harlea

As a father this is hard to read, you have written a fantastic poem here. Most of all it shows your humanity, it sums up what type of person you are to take time out to do this.
Awesome.

This is so sad. I see what youre saying writing as if someone else. Its difficult to put yourself in peoples shoes and write about it. Well done! A story too many families can relate to :(

Tiny Fingers

- best title for this piece, this title alone is so unique and when you read this and see it is in the sad section you know it will be a tearful read.

Kaylee Jane Harper born 5th of may 2002
An angel from heaven that was sent to you
Who would have imagined, who would have thought?
That just nine years later her life was cut short

- good opening flow, quite fast and you have made it rhyme which adds tot he speed of the flow. You are introducing the character here so the reader knows straight away who they are reading about.

Walking home from school she starts to freeze
She sees a dark shadow hiding in the trees
She was so young; her life had only just begun
Then in one short moment she was gone from the sun

- touching stanza, it was creepy to imagine this shadow in the tree's, knwoing his plans for this girl and yet her innocence had no idea of the monsters in this world and what lay in store for her. Such a sad thing to happen. Your last line emphasised how quickly these crimes are done.

They finally caught him he will not escape
He started to cry as he admitted to rape
He took away her purity, her sweet inner soul
Now her mother and father, have only a teddy to hold

- again another moving part of the poem, especially since you go into details about what he done to the child. Then to end it with the image of a grieving couple mourning their daughter clutching onto her teddy bear. I would imagine them smelling it for her scent and just holding onto it like it was the last piece of remains of their daughter. Devastating imagery, but well worded for it to create this affect.

He was given life but at least he gets to live
I hope it destroys him as he thinks about what he did
She will never be able to rest, be at peace in the ground
Because her tiny body will never ever be found

- very big topic to add in about the punishment for this crime, it is widely debatable but in my opinion the time is never ever enough punishment for the crime. Ending this by informing the reader her body was never found just adds more devastation, as if it wasnt enough the abuse he bestowed on her, to leave her parents without a chance to say a proper goodbye is unimaginable.

A very touching piece, and since you have read my poetry you will understand I can relate to this and think you done a good job here.

This is so moving!! So so moving!

The flow here is also wonderful. I should nominate it, but I'm out of nominations! :/

Too bad.

What I liked the most was the rhyming scheme and the opening. It gave descriptive thoughts and increased the depth of thoughts.

Wonderful idea.. 5/5