Dark Matter

by BEglen   Aug 12, 2011


This Love i feel is like a cancer
I feel it spread through out my body
I wish i had an answer

To how your
I Love You's
Ended in such a manner

To return to the Beast
Who struck and shook you
under any kinda manner

I never would of treated you in such a way
Why would you go back to such a mistake
Our life would of been great

To escape our past in a new place
Gerber Daisy is the flower I picked for you
Large and bold much like my Love for you

Flowers and Bears and so much more
But you couldn't wait to discard them
as i walked out the door

Sadness and Depression is all that you've left for me
And all I ever wanted was to take a knee
To ask you to forever be with me

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  • 13 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    I liked this one, the title is GREAT!!! I just love it! creative and new.

    This Love i feel is like a cancer<< like the metaphor
    I feel it spread thru out my body (spelling; through, not thu)
    I wish i had an answer *please capitalize the I, it looks better*

    To how you're (grammar; your, not you're)
    I Love You's
    Ended in such a manner

    To return to the Beast
    Who struck and shook you
    under any kinda manner
    ^ love this stanza, the way you portrayed change in a person is great.

    I never would of treated you in such a way
    Why would you go back to such a mistake
    Our life would of been great
    Here or outta state
    ^ this one sorta ruined the flow, the four lines in the middle of 3 line stanzas... it also has a different beat<<< nice beat, but doesn't fit

    The rest is good, nothing wrong with it... and the ending is beautiful. Well written :)

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