I liked this one, the title is GREAT!!! I just love it! creative and new.

This Love i feel is like a cancer<< like the metaphor
I feel it spread thru out my body (spelling; through, not thu)
I wish i had an answer *please capitalize the I, it looks better*

To how you're (grammar; your, not you're)
I Love You's
Ended in such a manner

To return to the Beast
Who struck and shook you
under any kinda manner
^ love this stanza, the way you portrayed change in a person is great.

I never would of treated you in such a way
Why would you go back to such a mistake
Our life would of been great
Here or outta state
^ this one sorta ruined the flow, the four lines in the middle of 3 line stanzas... it also has a different beat<<< nice beat, but doesn't fit

The rest is good, nothing wrong with it... and the ending is beautiful. Well written :)