Trapped by my heart(collab with liliana)

I love this smooth, rapid, uninterrupted, deep flow :)

Your words are moving, both of you, and this read was well.. Enjoyable :)

I'm so glad whenever i read some refreshing and inspiring pieces. !!

good one

This poem was emotional and powerful, two traits in a poem that I find admirable. The arrangement of rhymes in this poem is as smooth as its lines. Well done to the both of you :D

I thought two talented people created an awesome poem, it was riddled with emotions, and flowed together with ease :-)
awesome you two
Connie

I disagree with unspoken that my Liliana wasn't that great and that Tony helped her because a collab is the harvest of more than one talent :)
And I believe that you two not only one of you have the talent.

Let me show you my favorite part, guys:

"Wrapped in chains
My love always remains
A prisoner of deep infatuation
A slave of heart suffocation"

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This is a great mixture of pure love and desire I guess, maybe I'm wrong but that's what I grasped. A comma after "chains" would help, sweets. :)
Good work!

My intoxicating feelings
Have no more healings
Thirsty for your passion
I become ill and ashen

Daggers in my heart
These feelings wont part
Inhabiting my brain
I feel Lost and insane..

These two stnzs ..wow..speaks al..
2gthr,U two are perfct..
U hlpd lil a lot in getin betr at hr poetry skills.
I loved dis poem a lot coz its kinda my style..
Plz ,a req to u both write more poetry of dis style..