I truly loved this piece as your 'soft' thoughts always make heavy, enchanting to read poems.

Nothin' I suggest.. Nothing.
But:

the end :p I think it weakened it? I don't know, but it's my opinion :/

Anyways, The opening was great and so was the thoughts after, structured carefully, and the wording was captivating.

An EXCELLENT poem of yours. 5/5

This read so easily, almost like reading a favorite book. Though sad it was excellent
Connie

This poem felt to me like breaking through that wall between wanting and what
you are really held back from doing. The ending was like a huge reality crash and it left me wondering how to win over these failures. The scene "untie my emotions and tears into thunders and rainfalls" is like letting go and finding yourself again. A heartbreaking piece, making me crave for freedom. Only suggestion would be the line breaks were (only to me though) not flowing as well as they could have, I personally think the structure could be stronger, but the content speaks louder; it holds nothing back. An emotional, tearing write.

Thanks for your entry!
MaryAnne

Sometimes, there are some metaphors and expressions in your writes that I can barely understand and sometimes I don't, but that is not because they are too complicated, nor because I'm stupid (HELL no! :P) but because you are really clever while choosing them, you choose the right simile for the right feeling and put it in the right place! whether it be this powerful ending or your eye-catchy opening, I was drawn in until the end and wanted to read morrrreee and morrreeee and morreeeeee!

something I HATE about your poetry is that it ends :P it leaves me craving for more and that is NOT positive, be aware of this! and you should always write for us!

See? see why I told ya I don't really much like 87?? because it is not like this emotional sad fantastic wonderful amazing beautiful everything write!!!!!

five out of five!