WOW! This piece is amazing!! It is strong to start off with but it only grows stronger. The word choice is excellent, even though it is simple it does not cross the boarder into plain. Your voice is clear and shone very well. Story or ourpose and the creativity go hand in hand and are used to make each other bolder. Flow is not a problem in this piece like most pieces I have seen lately, so congrats there. Emotion is highly executed, and I must say that you have aced that portion of writing poetry. All in all, I must say you have penned a magnificent piece.