The lagoon

This is my fav out of this excellent poem 5/5

Swimming is like flying
over teeming coral reef
gliding without trying
time seems far too brief.

I love the simile in the beginning- you choose your word choice precisely and it makes a sharp mark.......the idea of time flying past you is haunting, the unforeseen, the unknown ahead of you in a blink.

I felt first stanza was stronger and the "what"- did not add much effect for me. Great short piece which leaves reader creating the rest!

MaryAnne

Is it suppose to be a dark or a fantasy poem?
Either way it is a good poem. I liked the first stanza more then the 2nd. Nicely worded.

5/5

Your words made me feel I was on a deserted island being watched by some unknown creature. I loved it.