Carcinogenic Heart (Collab with Lebanese Phoenix)

A beautifully sad poem. Once I went through it once I had to read it again and it was even better. I liked how you talked about the red and white winters. I loved this line:

But between two breaths,
time chars, and life degrades
silently -
biding farewells
of terrestrial torment.

Great job
5/5

I like this a lot, wait no scratch that, I Love it! You guys are fabulous on your own but work together and it is even better then alone! Fabulous job!!

On a side note, MarryAnne, I <3 ya! xD

Wow....you know Abed, MarryAnne, you guys together make miracles. You both could write a fairytale, jeeezzze, you are such a mixture! haha :)

Def -freaking- initely, the opening was the best best part of it all, I was taken away by its amazingness...grrrrr Now I want to write a collab, with you two :P

He buries her soul
among choleric rosebushes-
a webbing of
"I will wait for you's"
that never bloomed
in red winter trials.
^^^
duppeeeeeee deeeee dooo
isn't this supposed to be like this:

"I will wait for you"s
????

the s after the apost. I don't know, it just didn't seem right the way it is now.. :)

"But she will never know..."
^^^
I'm totally unsure who wrote this but upon my honor this is the best pause ever! good for whoever wrote this line, made me ponder for few seconds.

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The wording was 'omg'.
The ending really left me speechless, I really don't know what to say here! ughhh help me! :P
five ;)

So Happy to do the second collab, again, with you :D

You're one of a kind, and working with you is so much fun and comfortable!

5/5
;)